Wednesday, June 22, 2011

SOME COUPLETS

I have another couple of serious posts in the pipeline. One is ready for posting while two are in finalizing stage. But I am not posting the ready one as I have already given two thought provoking posts. So here I am sharing some couplets which I scribbled more than 3 decades ago on reverse of bus tickets while traveling in night service bus from Guwahati to Tezpur. These are in mixed language. I remember these 3 and can not find my diary in which I had transferred all.

MAIN TUJHE BHOOLNE KI KOSHISH KARTA HOON,

PAR HAR KOSHISH PE TERI YAAD AATI HAI,

MUJHE TUMSE MILNE KI UMEED NAHIN,

PAR HAR AAHAT PE TERI YAAD AATI HAI.

( Gist in English for those who can not understand this : I am making efforts to forget you but on each effort your memories come flooding back. I have no hope of meeting you but on sound of each footfall your memories come flooding back )

MUJHE IS DUNIYA MEIN SACHE PYAAR KI TAMNAA HAI,

LOG KAHTE HAIN TU PAAGAL HAI,

TUMHEIN AMAVAS MEIN CHAAND KI TAMNAA HAI.

( I am looking for true love in this world, people call me mad saying I am looking for moon on dark moonless night )

MAIN TUMSE KUCHH KAHNAA CHAHTAA HOON,

PAR BAAT LABON TAK AA KE RUK JAATI HAI,

NAZRON KI ZUBAN SE KEH DOON,

PAR TERI NAZREIN TO MILTE HI JHUK JAATI HAIN.

( I wish to say something to you but it halts at my lips, I could say so with expression of eyes but you lower your eyes on meeting mine )

34 comments:

Sanjana said...

Nice ones.. bt I think...still needs some kind of finishing..

♪♪HARINI♪♪ said...

Nice ones Uncle J! Liked the last one :)

mudita said...

Hi Jack,You seem to be a pure romantic. Good job. Carry on.

Tongue-fu Lady said...

encore! encore!

btw when were u in guwahati? we might have crossed paths :)

Harman said...

Wah wah Sir,kya baat hai..
lovely couplets...
I think you were missing Mam ;-)

Ritika said...

Really??

People, please stop saying these kind of cheesy lines in the public transport. It is so embarrassing.

LOL.

Ellen said...

Very nice thoughts, Jack. I like them. I think short entries from you are also so much pleasure to read just as much as your other long stories. God bless you and your family.

Tanvi said...

Nice ones!! :)

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viddhi said...

haha...nice..nice.
seems like you wrote....them long ago.
it has a youthfull charm!! :-)

Aparana Pitale said...

nice kinda shayari... those were actually written in the bus?? or else :D

Sh@s said...

Awesome lines. Do write more. Even I like randomly scribbling here and there on paper bills and scraps of paper.

Jack said...

SANJANA :

Thanks for appreciation and positive suggestion. I hardly write now a days but will keep it in mind. Take care


HARINI :

So nice to see you and thanks for such encouraging comments. Take care


MUDITA :

Thanks. It was one of those days which have not yet made a come back. Take care


T-F L :

Thanks for encouragement. How I wish we had but I have not been that lucky. It was more than 3 decades ago and I am sure you had not arrived on our Mother Earth that time. Take care

Jack said...

HARMAN :

You bet, I was. Take care


RITIKA :

You find my compositions embarrassing? I am hurt. Take care


ELLEN :

Thanks for appreciation. Take care


TANVI :

Thanks. Take care

Jack said...

VIDDHI :

Thanks. I had confessed that I scribbled these more than 3 decades ago. Take care


APARANA :

Yes, I assure you it was while I had to travel in night service bus. Thanks for appreciation. Replied in previous posts too. Thanks again for reading all those. Take care


SHE@S :

Welcome to my space. Hope to see you more often and also your valuable views on some of my previous posts too. I will visit you a s a p. Take care

Maryam said...

WAAAAAAAAHHHH!
Whatttaayy shayaarii.
Nice thoughts.

Mishi said...

awwwwwww I loved it!
one can easily imagine the spirit that worked behind this..they seem so genuine, so pure...not bounded by so-called hadood-queood of urdu poetry...some lines by an ordinary man thus expressing some of his most sacred and pure feelings...I loved it:-)

suruchi said...

wow...romantic-romantic;-)
kya baat hain...were these for Aunt Jack...hehe...as silly as that sounds:-)

kavita said...

Loved it .Hope you find your diary very soon .Have a beautiful day :)

Sach! said...

So so beautiful !!!! Loved it... Love at its best ;) hmm hmmm uncle Jack!

Arnav said...

Beautiful :) each one of them is written

Jack said...

MARYAM :

Thanks for encouragement. Take care


MISHI :

Welcome to my space. Hope to see you often. Do give your valuable views on some of my previous posts too. Thanks for such encouraging comments. Take care


KAVITA :

I too hope so. May you always have time as you wish for. Take care

Jack said...

SURUCHI :

I am so happy that you liked these. These were just at spur of moment. Take care


SACH :

You have given me motivation to find my diary or write some more. Take care


ARNAV :

Thanks for encouragement. Take care

☆ Rià ღ said...

Really good ones Uncle J. :)

Alka Gurha said...

Such meaningful poetry...Lovely.

Purba said...

Almost like a trailer for the things to come? Looking forward to your posts.

Jack said...

RIA :

Thanks for appreciation. Take care


ALKA :

This coming from you means a lot. Thanks. Take care


PURBA :

Taste buds tickled? Hope the main course is satisfying too. Take care

Ann said...

All three were very good.. and it's kind of a break from regular posts .. so, liked it :) the third was very good.. teri nazren jhuk jaati hain :)

suvaiba fatima ahmed said...

gr8 wrk..~
:)
nyc lines..!!
keep ryting
all wishes
tc
DASVADANIYA~
suvaiba

Jack said...

ANN :

I am so glad you liked these. That one is my favourite too. Take care


SUVAIBA :

Thanks you for your such encouraging appreciation. Take care

Nostalgic said...

Hello Uncle,
I'm sorry for my long absence on your space. I just read a few posts. And like always, you never fail to impress me :)

I loved the shaiirii .. esp the ending.

Take care :)

Jack said...

NOSTALGIC :

I am so glad to see you. I visited your space number of times but was told that it is closed. That got me worried and I had no way to reach you. Now I see after navigating from your comment that you have changed url of your space. Wish you had told me that. Anyway it is your choice. My id is in my profile.

I am glad that you find my writing worthwhile. Thanks for appreciating my effort to write few couplets. I too like the last one best. Take care

maheen ahmed said...

I am not much of a shairo shairi lover, but these tow shairs touched me deep.

Jack said...

Maheen,

I am glad you found them good. I am posting few more today. Take care

Nidhi said...

I loved the last one! :)